Revisions...again

I got the same feedback from three different readers of three different ages with different tastes, so I couldn't ignore them.

Much thought and work later, I have the revised first chapter of my novel, for those who care to read.

You can read it here: https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1wXHRnD85aXeJ_fUEzDq_Hpi4Ws3aolaePM6bsKrIau8

Or below, although the narrowness of the frame bothers me and I can't change it. It makes the paragraphs look REALLY long, which makes them hard to read.



Anda read it and said it's really two chapters. So here's my question: is this chapter 1, chapters 1 and 2, or chapters 1-3?